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Hello All! Chapter 1
Well! I made the decision to post "the Mary Sue Virus" here on LJ, finally, and because I'm bored I thought I'd create a community for it. And now that I'm typing, I realise how completely self serving that is! Anyway, I'm reviewing and tweaking the original story, nothing major just a few typos and continuity things that have been driving me mental. I figured reposting it was a great oppurtunity to fix all of that. So here we go! From the top ladies! Again, I'd like to thank Nanaea, Madapple, and Polywolly for letting he hijack their personalities!
The Mary Sue Virus
Fandom: Harry Potter
Rating: 18+
Warnings: Graphic Sexual situations, Oral, Angst
Disclaimer: The recognizable characters in this work of fiction and the world it is set in are the property of J.K Rowling and Warner Bros. Pictures. The original characters are the property of Dazzledfirestar, Nanaea, Madapple and Polywolly, and are not to be used without the permission of those individuals. I am not making any money from this and it is purely a flight of fancy for the purpose of entertainment only.
She sat down at her computer desk, the same way she did every other day, and turned the monitor on. In a few moments she’d signed onto the same site she always went to and was browsing the forums. Hmmm... Nobody’s on. She flipped back to the main page. A new message from the admins had been posted. She read it slowly:
Attention: There seems to be a rash of disappearances amongst our users recently. We are afraid that someone may be trolling the site for people willing to give out personal information. Please remember to always keep your personal info to yourself for your own safety. Please everyone, be careful!
On an unrelated note, we’ve come across a virus in our systems. It has yet to cause any problems and we are doing our best to keep it that way.
“Yikes.” She frowned at the screen hoping that the disappearances weren’t the reason none of the regulars were on the forums today. She went about checking her reviews and hits on her stories when suddenly she felt drowsy. She shook her head, checking her watch, but before the time could register, she fell asleep.
“It’s got to be her!” The voice drifted through her sleepy ears. “Who else would it be?” She fought to open her eyes to see two women standing over her. “Daz?” it took a second for the name to register. “Daz? Is that you?”
“Yeah...” She said slowly as she sat up. “Where the hell am I? What’s going on? I was sitting at my computer...” Daz finally looked closer at the women in front of her, and at the room they were in. The walls were stone, the beds a dark wood, the view out the windows told her they were somehow under water. The women gave her the last clue as to what was going on. They both wore uniforms, school uniforms... with green and silver striped ties. She took another long look at them and then down at herself. “Poly? Madapple?” They all nodded. “Jesus...” Her next words were interrupted by a knock at the door.
“Hurry up! You’ll be late for Potions!” the knocker called.
“We’ve been sucked into...”
“Hogwarts. Yup.” Poly sighed. “Seventh year by the sounds of it. I’ve been here two days. Nanaea is here too, but she’s a Ravenclaw. I haven’t run into any professors yet, or any other main characters... except other Slytherins but I've avoided them the best I could.”
“Well, then Potions should be interesting.” Madapple gave a grin. “Ummm... This may be a stupid question, but are any of us actually British?” they all looked at each other, wondering for the first time at the perfect accents they were now all sporting.
“Wow...” Daz smiled. “Gwyneth Paltrow, eat your heart out!” There came another knock at the door and they all gathered their things and made their way to the Slytherin common room. Hurrying past the congregation of boys, led, it seemed by Draco Malfoy, they whisked into the hallways to find Nanaea. “So... what do we know so far?” Before either girl could answer a dark haired pretty girl ran up to them.
“Oh thank god! Why couldn’t I have been in the same house as the rest of you?” the dark haired girl was quickly pulled into the group and Poly began to explain as the walked slowly through the dungeons.
“All I’ve gotten, info wise so far is our names. That was my first clue as to what’s going on here.” Daz cocked her head to the side. “I’m Issobell Widdershins, Madapple’s Hyacinth Ironmonger, Nanaea,” She motioned to the late joiner, “is Rowena Crystal.”
“At least I’m named after the founder of my house.” ‘Rowena’ grumbled.
“And you,” ‘Issobell’ continued, “are Azalea Haverty.” The others watched as 'Azalea’ thought through this information and a look of horror crossed over her face.
“Wait a minute... we all look fabulous... all have perfect accents... and those names...” Her hand came to her mouth. “You mean, we’re...” Issobell nodded her head slowly and solemnly.
“That’s right. Ladies, we’ve been sucked into a Mary-Sue.
The Mary Sue Virus
Fandom: Harry Potter
Rating: 18+
Warnings: Graphic Sexual situations, Oral, Angst
Disclaimer: The recognizable characters in this work of fiction and the world it is set in are the property of J.K Rowling and Warner Bros. Pictures. The original characters are the property of Dazzledfirestar, Nanaea, Madapple and Polywolly, and are not to be used without the permission of those individuals. I am not making any money from this and it is purely a flight of fancy for the purpose of entertainment only.
She sat down at her computer desk, the same way she did every other day, and turned the monitor on. In a few moments she’d signed onto the same site she always went to and was browsing the forums. Hmmm... Nobody’s on. She flipped back to the main page. A new message from the admins had been posted. She read it slowly:
Attention: There seems to be a rash of disappearances amongst our users recently. We are afraid that someone may be trolling the site for people willing to give out personal information. Please remember to always keep your personal info to yourself for your own safety. Please everyone, be careful!
On an unrelated note, we’ve come across a virus in our systems. It has yet to cause any problems and we are doing our best to keep it that way.
“Yikes.” She frowned at the screen hoping that the disappearances weren’t the reason none of the regulars were on the forums today. She went about checking her reviews and hits on her stories when suddenly she felt drowsy. She shook her head, checking her watch, but before the time could register, she fell asleep.
“It’s got to be her!” The voice drifted through her sleepy ears. “Who else would it be?” She fought to open her eyes to see two women standing over her. “Daz?” it took a second for the name to register. “Daz? Is that you?”
“Yeah...” She said slowly as she sat up. “Where the hell am I? What’s going on? I was sitting at my computer...” Daz finally looked closer at the women in front of her, and at the room they were in. The walls were stone, the beds a dark wood, the view out the windows told her they were somehow under water. The women gave her the last clue as to what was going on. They both wore uniforms, school uniforms... with green and silver striped ties. She took another long look at them and then down at herself. “Poly? Madapple?” They all nodded. “Jesus...” Her next words were interrupted by a knock at the door.
“Hurry up! You’ll be late for Potions!” the knocker called.
“We’ve been sucked into...”
“Hogwarts. Yup.” Poly sighed. “Seventh year by the sounds of it. I’ve been here two days. Nanaea is here too, but she’s a Ravenclaw. I haven’t run into any professors yet, or any other main characters... except other Slytherins but I've avoided them the best I could.”
“Well, then Potions should be interesting.” Madapple gave a grin. “Ummm... This may be a stupid question, but are any of us actually British?” they all looked at each other, wondering for the first time at the perfect accents they were now all sporting.
“Wow...” Daz smiled. “Gwyneth Paltrow, eat your heart out!” There came another knock at the door and they all gathered their things and made their way to the Slytherin common room. Hurrying past the congregation of boys, led, it seemed by Draco Malfoy, they whisked into the hallways to find Nanaea. “So... what do we know so far?” Before either girl could answer a dark haired pretty girl ran up to them.
“Oh thank god! Why couldn’t I have been in the same house as the rest of you?” the dark haired girl was quickly pulled into the group and Poly began to explain as the walked slowly through the dungeons.
“All I’ve gotten, info wise so far is our names. That was my first clue as to what’s going on here.” Daz cocked her head to the side. “I’m Issobell Widdershins, Madapple’s Hyacinth Ironmonger, Nanaea,” She motioned to the late joiner, “is Rowena Crystal.”
“At least I’m named after the founder of my house.” ‘Rowena’ grumbled.
“And you,” ‘Issobell’ continued, “are Azalea Haverty.” The others watched as 'Azalea’ thought through this information and a look of horror crossed over her face.
“Wait a minute... we all look fabulous... all have perfect accents... and those names...” Her hand came to her mouth. “You mean, we’re...” Issobell nodded her head slowly and solemnly.
“That’s right. Ladies, we’ve been sucked into a Mary-Sue.
Squee!
Now for the nit picky stuff.
"They all nodded. “Jesus...” He(r) next words were interrupted by a knock at the door."
“Wait a minute... we all look
edfabulous... all have perfect accents... and those names...”(I notice that you made the beginning a bit more generic too. ~_^)
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