Nanaea A. Naven (
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2007-10-26 12:43 am (UTC)
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Need. Cold. Shower.
I love this chapter. I've said it before and I'll say it again - pure brilliance! Two lemons!! What more can you ask for? (How about four? ~_^)
One typo:
"He leaned back further, giving her easier access to him
and she reach up
for the fly on his trousers."
...as she reached for the fly...?
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I love this chapter. I've said it before and I'll say it again - pure brilliance! Two lemons!! What more can you ask for? (How about four? ~_^)
One typo:
"He leaned back further, giving her easier access to him and she reach up for the fly on his trousers."
...as she reached for the fly...?